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neosis

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My fanfiction of viper
« on: December 23, 2005, 08:10:25 pm »
OKay, heres a portion of my fic.

Characters: Danny Huges (Age 19, Kazuma shell bullet look alike, main character) Scotty Jackson (Age 20, Kimishima Look alike, from scryed, danny's best friend)
Rebecca (Age 19, Jota basically, girlfriend of Danny's)

Legend: ( ) Inner Thoughts, * * Actions taking place.

Story: Starts off like an anime, Rebecca recieves a visit from her cousin and finds out he learned a new trick. She just had to show Danny. So she goes over to his house, waking him up, he gets out of bed, pissed off and prepares to punch whoever woke him up, he opens the door and see's rebecca, and trips over. He says "uh...morning rebecca, kinda early huh?"

Reb: I'll say, your not even dressed!

Danny: *Looks down and realizes that he was in his underwear* *Screams like a girl, runs inside and finds cloths fast* Whew thanks.

Reb: No problem

Danny: So whats up? Its not like yah to come by.....*looks at watch* at.....*looks again* 10:45, damn....overslept again

Reb: My cousin came home, and I just had to show you!

Danny: *unexcited* Your..cousin?

Reb: yes, come here sam.

Danny: Sam?..........*Looks at sam* SWEET MERCIFUL HEAVENS YOU'RE A LARGE MAN!!

Reb: Yep he is..........big.



Danny: Does he talk?

Reb: Nope!

Danny: *looking dumb* *drops pencil* Crap, hold on *Sam picks it up* Oh um thankyou (This guys not so bad)
*Sam eats his pencil* AHH! (he.....he ate my  pencil, that can't be normal) *Drops 10 pencils purposfully, sam eats them all* Good God man!

Reb: Stop eating those pencils, its not good for your health. *Sam falls asleep* Oh, thats the thing about him, he cant speak but he does the most craziest of things.

*All of a sudden, scotty comes around and beeps his horn*

Scotty: Hey "virgin boy", lets get a move on! (What he means is that since Danny and rebecca both fear std's they vowed NEVER to have sex with each other, untill marraige, ever since that scotty's been teasing them eversince)

Danny: Oh there's scotty, well I guess I gotta go.

Reb: Wait, where are you going?

Danny: me and scott have to uh....

Scotty: Pick up my new car from the dealer!

Danny: Uh.........yeah (THATS THE BEST YOU COULD THINK OF!?)

Reb: Oh...okay.

Danny: Hey dont worry, we'll be back before you know it!

Reb: I know, its just that I worry about you, you always seem to get into danger with gangs even though you've never been injured it scares me to think what might happen to you, I mean your the only man who is ever so kind to me, never treating like garbage like other guys but you fight so much, not to mention you lose your temper sometimes.

Danny: Hey come on, have I ever steared you wrong?

Reb: well that one time you crashed into my house after being hit in the head......

Scotty: Come on Romeo, you can talk later, lets go!

Danny: ALRIGHT DAMMIT! *sigh* look, i'll be back with no scratches, promise. *Kisses her on the cheek and leaves.

Reb: *pinches Danny*

Danny: hey...

Reb: A pinch of luck to you.

Danny: hehe, yeah...see yah later!

*Leaves with scotty*

While in the car

Sco: Boy, you and Rebecca sure can talk!

Danny: Shut up and drive, its bad enough that your forcing me to go to this place, what was it again?

Scotty: Sogna's Viper Cafe! The "hottest" Cafe in town, Food, shows, and ofcourse ladies!

Danny: My god you sound like a tv commercial.

Scotty: I do what I can, and besides its for your own good!

Danny: Its a whore house slash titty bar, what makes you think I'd want to do this?

Scotty: Think about it, rebecca's your GF and she wont give you any..........

Danny: WE AGREED NOT TO! Im a "virgin boy" for a reason!

Scotty: Thats why you gotta come here, unless you 2 plan to....fool around.

Danny: STFU!

Scotty: Geeze man cant you take a joke!?

Danny: No, I cant believe you'ed make me do this....behind her back, she's to sweet of a girl to betray her trust.

Scotty: But YOU DID AGREE to do this, so blame yourself, besides its a great way to get an experience, w/o hitting any bases that is.

Danny: Why dont you get a job doing AD's?

Scotty: Because my job is to babysit you!

Danny: jerk.

Scotty: Oh dont worry, its gonna be alright.

Danny: It better be, or else im gonna kick your ass!

Scotty: okay, okay, well, here we are, to the one and only, VIPER CAFE!

To be continued.....

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Re: My fanfiction of viper
« Reply #1 on: December 25, 2005, 07:03:09 pm »
Chapter 2: "Cafe Astray"

New characters: Akira(Age 18, Red headed waitress)
                       Karin(Age 16, Blonde waitress)
                       Saki(Age 19, Blue haired waitress)

When we last saw our heroes, Danny huges and Scotty Jackson have arrived to the illustrus Viper Cafe.

Danny: Wow, this looks like a whore house.

Scotty: quit complaining "virgin" boy and come on inside.

Danny: (bastard!)

They go inside and find the place filled with messy teenagers, middle-aged fat guys, and half-naked waitresses.

Danny: Jesus, this place is worse than I thought.

Scotty: Hey, thats how most qoute "whore houses" are packed with, so, whatcha wanna do first?

Danny: Lets have some to go then.

Scotty: FOOD TO GO? Are you serious? We just got here!

Danny: exactly! I dont want to spend another moment in this place! I still can't believe I let you talk me into this, going against Rebecca's trust like this.

Scotty: yeah, but you DID agree to this, so you might as well find a woman at this place to "ugol"!

Danny: None of them look like rebecca, so they fail at stimulating me.

Scotty: Did rebecca?

Danny: Watch it pal.

Scotty: Come on now, at least give them a chance!

Danny: nope, all I want is food.

Scotty: Oh alright, but we eat in!

Danny: Fine, if it will make you happy!

While the 2 argued, they were being watched by 3 girls in the dressing room.

Karin: You know, its kinda strange that this guy is making a big fuss about being here.

Saki: He probably has "sexual tension"!

Karin: No, thats extremely rare!

Akira: No he just has doubts and regrets about being in a place like this, especially since he HAS a girlfreind!

Saki: Thats just like you akira, always finding out men. So what are you gonna do about it?

Akira: Well, I guess i'll go out theer and "cheer him up"!

While this occured, a lone frater in space neared our atmosphere.

Seed: So, this is earth?

HM: yes sir!

Seed: Set a course, immediatly!

Back at the resturaunt....

Danny: Damn, how long is this gonna take?

Scotty: Dont worry, besides, YOU were the one who said we should wait!

Danny: *smiles* You know what I just realized? This cafe is nothing more than a gimmick of what a resturaunt is supposed to be? I mean why else would you go to a cafe with bad service? A cafe is nothing w/o its food and service!

Scotty: and what service! *Looks at another waitress walking by*

Danny: and besides, why should it take this long to order? It wouldn't be popular w/o

Scotty: you know, you got a point (for once!) *Turns around* Hey can we get our ord...ers........take....*Stops and stares*

Danny: You know you could finish....your....sentence.....*stares*



Scotty: (Oh yeah, where has she been all my life?)

Danny: (omg, she is gorgeus! wait, I have a woman, cant be tempted!) *Hides behind his menu card*

Akira: Hello, welcome to Viper cafe, what will you be ordering?

Scotty: *gulp* whatever is on that plate of yours!

Akira: Oh *chuckles* dont worry, you'll get your "share". *Looks at Danny, behind the card* And what will you be having?

Danny:Ill have a grilled chicken with fries.

Akira: you know you dont have to stare at your menu.

Danny: I just need a good look, thats all.

Akira: *tips the card down*

Danny: *Looks up, blushes*

Akira: Look, I understand how a man feels when he's surrounded by women everywhere, but thats just the half of how exciting it can be, so *puts a finger on danny's chin and pushes it up* keep a chin up and have as much fun as you can! I'll be back with your orders.

Scotty: HOT DAMN!!! DIDNT I TELL YOU THIS PLACE WAS THE JOINT!?

Danny: Well I have to admit, she did have a nice pair on her.

Scotty: whats that? you made a comment on her boobs, didn't you?

Danny: what?

Scotty: thats the spirit man! Now I have a good friend bring here EVERY friday!

Danny: going a little to far, eh scott?

Scotty: Don't be crazy.

Danny: I think I feel queezy after seeing her though.

Scotty: Yeah, she's something alright.

Danny: I think I need a bathroom!

Scotty: Hey *askes a waitress for directions to the bathroom* in the back eh? I'll meet you there!

Danny: SCOTT!!

W: whats his problem?

Scotty: nothing, he's just gay.

Danny: YOU JACKASS!!! *Walks to the bathroom*

Danny: Boy, scott can make me look like an ass sometimes. *Looks around after doing his.........bussiness and finds akira* Um....isn't there a ladies room? Miss?

Akira: Oh hello, enjoying yourself yet?

Danny: Um...what are you doing in the mens room?

Akira: Well we dont have a ladies room, since only guys come here.

Danny:..............................

Akira: what?

Danny: *Walks out quickly* Thats it scott, I dont give a rats ass about the food, were outta here!!

Scotty: what you cant be serious!

Danny: as hell!..........wait, *looks up into the sky from the door windows* Since when do we get a huge ship in the sky?

In the "ship in the sky"

Seed: This place is full of hosts, beam them up asap!

To be continued.......

Next chapter: The alien race.
« Last Edit: December 26, 2005, 06:10:28 pm by neosis »

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Re: My fanfiction of viper
« Reply #2 on: December 29, 2005, 03:18:02 pm »
Chapter 3: the alien race

New characters: Irear (Age 20, Blue haired servant of seed)
                       Narsha (age 19, Red haired servant of seed)
                       Tina Huges (Age 45, Danny's mother)

When we last left our heroes, danny huges and scotty jackson were having quite a hard time at the illustrous viper cafe, however, awkward situations disturbed danny causing him to want to leave as soon as possible, yet, that wasn't about to happen. An alien frater had come to earth, in search of women. They had abducted the intire cafe!!



Danny: I dont like what the **ck is going on around here!

Scotty: Hey, look on the bright side, we can stay inside, and look at girls al day! Besides I think we should stay inside!

Danny: you dumbass! Where else can we go? We're in the middle of space!



Scotty: hmm....so why does it look like a burnt forest?

Danny: wallpaper....

Scotty: Wow, so realistic!

Danny: *sigh* well now I know who's ass im gonna kick!

Scotty: j-jst hold on a sec wiil yah?

Danny: HELL NO!! Remember what I said?

Scotty: yeah, but why would you do harm to me?

Danny: Son of a....COME ER!

*while the 2 simply fussed at each other, everyone was in terrible fear of what was going to happen!*



Karin: Whats going on?

Saki: I dont know, I just find it weird that this place is moving like crazy! Its probably a minor earth quake.

Karin: *looks outside* Wow, earth quakes happen in space?

Saki: Space? Wait, thats impossible. Where's Akira?

*She was still in the bathroom*

Akira: *crying* Whats happening? Why are we shaking?

Saki: Akira! What are you doing?

Akira: Im afraid of whats going to happen to us.

Saki: Nothing bad will happen, all we need to do is put our heads together and calm down and get to the bottom of this, dont worry so much. I cant believe your actually crying, you have no idea whats going on!

Akira: *sigh* yeah your right. I have to pull myself together. Thanks saki.

Saki: Yeah.....what are friends....for?

*Meanwhile, back on earth, danny's girlfriend rebecca jota has a terrible nightmare*



*then in her dream, danny comes and kills the beast, and it ends*

Reb: *Wakes up and cries* Oh Danny!

*She goes downstairs for a cup of water, when all of a sudden, she becomes concerned for Danny and calls his house*

Tina: *wakes and answers the phone* If this isn't a charming new husband, im hanging up!!

Reb:Miss huges its me, rebecca.

Tina: Rebecca? You do realize its..*looks at clock*....3 ****ing AM!?

Reb: (Now I see where danny gets it from!) Well, im worried about him.

Tina: (So what else is new?) You DO realize that he is a big boy? He can take care of himself, given the fact that he knows hapkido and all.

Reb: Yes I know, but he hasn't come back since he left with scotty to get his new car.

Tina: NEW CAR!? HA! Scotty doesn't even have a job, let alone enough money.

Reb: What!?

Tina: I wouldn't worry, those 2 are good friends, they would never try to kill each other.

*You couldn't be more wrong*

Scotty: GET OFF OF MY BACK!

Danny: Not untill I break it!

*Then the place halts to a stop*

Danny: wait,what the hell's happening?

Scotty: Dont ask me! Sh**! My back is in pain!

*The building is then beemed into a certain chamber, where the building dissintigrates into nothingness, leaving the people inside exposed. While this was happening, in a certain room.*



Irear: How do you like it so far?

Seed: Please, put your breasts upon my greatness!

Irear: Alright..



Irear: How does that feel?

Seed: Keep going!

*All of a sudden, one of his henchman comes in*

HM: Sir, your biotic hosts have arrived.....yeck!

Seed: *sigh* fine, you'll have to excuse me irear, I must complete my "mission"

Irear: *chuckles* Yes my lord.

*Seed gets dressed, then marches toward the chambers*

Seed: In order to restore my race to the living once more, some drastic measures must be taken! Even if this shames my race, I will repopulate it as soon as possible!

HM: umm....you told us tis a million times, but did we have to abduct the entire building?

Seed: why, did we pick up any unwelcome guests?

HM: Yes sir, we picked up males as well as a the women hosts sir.

Seed: Males? hmmm...Show me then!

*in the holding cells*

Danny: HEY WTF DO I LOOK LIKE!? Some sort of vigilante?

Scotty: Its bad enough that we're locked were locked up you know, screaming and yelling might make it worse than it already is!

Danny: Piss off! Its YOUR fault we're here!!

Scotty: Like I said before, you agreed to come!

Danny: SAY THAT AGAIN! SEE IF I DONT COME OVER THERE AND DRIVE MY FOOT INTO YOUR NOSE!!!

Seed: I say, this one has quite the temper!

Danny: WHO THE FUCK ARE YOU!? Are you the bitch who us here!?

Seed: I recommend you gain etiquete immeediatly!

Danny: I recommend you let me out of here so I can make you eat those words!

HM: Why you.....we should terminate this one imeediatly!!

Scotty: Oh no, Danny!

Seed: Wait, if he's eager to fight, then let us accept his request!

Danny: You really are a dumbass!

Scotty: This guy has no idea what we can do with fists!

Danny: Oh well, time to kick some ass!

*Danny charges foward with a punch, however seed slides a little foward as Danny nears, and simply knee's him in the chest*

Danny: *gasps* (How....how the hell did do that?)

Scotty: *speechless*

Seed: Primitive tactics of combat as always. *He then tosses him with his knee, turns around and heads for the exit*
Take this fool to the domain of judgement, I will meet him later!

Scotty: Damn....he kick your ass...in the chest!

Danny: Fuck...you....sco...*faints*

*seed then goes to another holding chamber*

Seed: So these are the hosts?

HM: Yes sir! Wow they're beautiful, especially that red head! Oh momma I envy those insects!

Seed: They are for reproduction, not your enjoyment! Although....*looks at akira*..hmm....after the transmissions, send her to my quarters.

HM: As for now?

Seed: Begin the transmissions!






*For long hours, women were sexually abused by mysterious insects, over and over again, never stopping, never-ending torment, meanwhile*

Danny: Where the hell am I?

Seed: Ah! I see that you have made it!

Danny: TF? YOU BROUGHT ME HERE!!

Seed: Shut up! Tell me, who are you? Why do you defy me?

Danny: First of all, I dont who the fuck you are, second you've got the nerve to kidnap me, scotty, and everyone else around here? And for purpose do you have for us?

Seed: That info is classified, you dont need to know!

Danny: Bullshit! If your so high and mighty you'ed ave the ball to tell me straight up!

Seed: so common of humans, to act with such hatred towards something they have no idea about.

Danny: Bitch! You've got some nerve, you "aliens" think your so perfect than everyone else you believe your superior to me!

Seed: but I am, you handled yourself poorly in combat!

Danny: Come down here and say that to my face!!

Seed: Very well!

*His stand lowered and he went near Danny, he attacks, seed counters by grabbing is foot, and twists it, flipping danny on his face.

Seed: You see? I find it funny that you still stupid.

Danny: One thing about humans *weakly gets up off the ground* its that we speak proper english! Now stop mocking me and FIGHT!!!

*As the fight insue's Scotty watches from a moniter*

Scotty: Holy shit! This guy is incredible! Danny is pulling out all the moves, but he ain't doing shit!

Prisoner: Your friend fights well, but he cant do much.

Scotty: Hey, I know Danny, he is a good fighter! I know he can take this S.O.B.!

*However, danny is throw into a wall, crashing through to scotty's cell*

Scotty: WHoa! you okay?

Danny: That jackass, there's no way he's better than me, no one on earth could beat me, how did he......

Scotty: Well this guys not from earth! Who is he?

*Seed leaves, and enters his room. He see's his request fulfilled as akira is in there*

Seed: Ah, so this is the beauty that I saw! What is your name?

Akira: Who's.....the..jerk that wants to...know? *She is exhausted after what has been done to her*

Seed: Oh, forgive me, my name is seed.

Akira: Akira.....who do you think you are!? What the hell did you do to me, and all of the other girls, sicking those..........things on us!?

Seed: Im sorry, but it is what must be done, in order for my mission to be completed.

Akira: What!?

Seed: it is simple, long ago on a planet known as talrega, a race known as the astani existed, we lived in greatness, and unafraid of disaster, I lived as a prince, my family was rich and powerful, and I was told that I was the one to save my race from extinction, but one day, my world changed, when life began anew. A virus was born, it made my race......deseased. They coroded, rotting corpse by corpse, I was the only one undiagnosed, I had a new mission, my race had to come back. "I know this backstory sucks, but I got lazy here."

Akira: But why all of these girls?

Seed: Come now, what other race can reproduce?

Akira: Animals!

Seed: You are simply a funny woman, hmm..I simply love those types!

*Outside the room*

Irear: I dont believe this, who does he think he is, with another woman!

Narsha: hmph! It seems that one woman is jealous of our lords new friend.

Irear: Im not, its just that, being sex slaves for one person, and he gets another one?

Narsha: its something else isn't it? When I first became a new slave you were so angry about it. Tell me, have you fallen in love with him?

Irear: you are a child narsha, I could never love someone who enslaves me.

Seed: Now tell me, when the insect penetrated you, how did it feel?

Akira: What?

Seed: Come on, tell me....tell me.

Akira: No, get away from me!

Seed: Please, tell me...

*All of a sudden, an image of a man akira knew pops into her head as the man in seeds face*

Akira: GET AWAY FROM ME!! *she runs out the door*

Seed: STOP HER!! *a gaurd catches her*

Akira: let me go! Get him away from me!

Seed: PLEASE MISS!! Im not here to hurt you.

*Akira calms down, pauses, then hugs seed while crying*

Akira: Please....dont let him get, I dont to go trough that again, please.

Seed: Take her to the lone chamber, apparently this experience has spawned a horrible past for her.

*meanwhile, in the holding cells*

Danny: fuck, how did all of this happen? First I go to a whore house, then I get abducted by psychopaths......

Scotty: and then you get your ass kicked by the leader!

Danny: To hell with you!

Scotty: Get off your damn trip already, jesus your still mad?

Danny: Hell yes, I wont be able to see my family or rebecca again.

Scotty: Hey now come on, I have people down on earth too.

Danny: Yeah, your damn car.

Scotty: See? your being selfish now, whats your problem? Everyday you always have that attitude problem , no one can talk to you w/o getting pissed off for no reason!

Danny: Because its all greek to me!

Scotty: no because its the same stuff we keep telling you, you dont listen to anyone, you think your better than everyone else resulting in your ass whooping, and you think everyone is out to get you.

Danny: Throughout my life, people attempted murder on me, every corner, milestone, and piece of dirt, I have no love. Nothing but hatred comes my way.

Scotty: Your mother loves you.

Danny: she's supposed to, thats the only reason.

Scotty: and she never put you outside in the cold. Plus, rebecca loves you.

Danny: but to what extent? When she finds out what I did, she'll never speak to me again!

Scotty: She'll forgive you, I know she will.

Danny: Its because of you that im in deepshit! Why do you always get me in situations like this?

Scotty: Because you dont know how to live life to its fullest. Everyday I see you cramped inside your house, trying to be safe from the outside world, dont you know if you dont go into these situations you ultimatley waste your life? Doing nothing and not living life to its fullest, its dumb, and you keep taking life for granted. You never appreciate things, think about it, you are afraid of sex, WHY? Because of std's, pregnancy, etc. They make drugs and condems for a reason!

Danny: So what? Just because you have something, doesn't mean you take risks with it.

Scotty: But thats how fun life can be! Taking risks, getting into trouble, getting out of tough situations, falling in and out of love, having sex, going to bars full of woman, feeling women, kissing them, hell thats all a part of life, and your missing out on it!

Danny: Yeah...I guess I was impatient since I went to that damn bar.

Scotty: And the mere fact that you keep traveling with me is a sign that you want to experience life a little more, you know your missing out, you just dont want to admit it! Come on, tell me you liked the cafe.

Danny: ................................

Scotty: ............well?

Danny: .......yes, I loved looking at the women, seeing an actual pair of breasts was quite a sight.

Scotty: See? it shows I love you too.

Danny: Dont get gay on me.

Scotty: No really, your the only friend I ever have....one to put up with, and im the only friend you ever have, doesn't that mean something to you?

Danny: Besides the bar, what have you done for me?

Scotty: Im your key to life itself, and besides, if it wasn't for me, you would never have met Rebecca in the first place, back in high school you 2 were the lousiest freshmen I had seen, so afraid of everything, I thought you 2 would be a perfect couple, and you 2 are.

Danny: *stares at scotty, then starts tearing* God, your right, your right, you are my ticket, I depend on you for most shit! If it wasn't...for you......I would have never met...the most perfect girl in my life.

Scotty: Man you suck, earlier you were acting like a badass, now you cry. I cant believe I made you cry!

Danny: *still crying* Fuck you.

Scotty: Well, I guess its my job to see to it that you and rebecca see each other again!

Danny: what?

Scotty: I found some explosives lying around as soon as we got here, so I figured hell why not take some?
           Shall we bust outta here.....friend?

Danny: Yeah, friend, lets make like the wind!

*An explosion follows, the alarms go off*

Seed: what in gods name is going on?

HM: 2 prisoners have escaped sir.

Seed: What? FIND THEM!!!

Scotty: Whew, that was close!

Danny: Good thing you didn't kill us!

Scotty: Check it out! Escape pods.

Danny: Alright, now lets...*He spots a window, where akira is being held* hey its that red head from the bar.

Scotty: *with hearts in his eyes* REALLY!? WHERE!?

Danny: Wow, no cloths.

Scotty: SWEET!

Danny: your hopeless.

Scotty: Oh well, lets go then.

Danny: ........yeah, sucks to be them!

*But then danny looks back at her, pitying her, watching tears roll down her cheek*

Danny: scott, I dont think its a good Idea to leave em here.

Scotty: so what?

Danny: Come on, hav a heart, they need our help.

Scotty: *sighs* why should we?

Danny: You son of a bitch! If it weren't for them you would never get an errection easily!

Scotty: Talk about a stupid reason!

Danny: and they are human beings like us, they NEED us, maybe one of them will love you if you save them, that includes akira you know!

Scotty: oh damn, you convinced me, *sigh* (give a youngster a speech and he thinks he can do something) Well if you wanna be a hero then fine, lets save the sexies!

Danny: ..........yeah, lets.......save the ...........sexies.

To be continued......

Next time: Heroes....

 
« Last Edit: December 30, 2005, 03:35:21 am by neosis »

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Re: My fanfiction of viper
« Reply #3 on: January 06, 2006, 08:32:51 pm »
No offense mate, but I can't stand this style of writing, it's unrealistic and basically looks like you copy/pasted a roleplay from AIM or Yahoo!

There are a lot of methods of writing fanfiction, besides this one that work much better, try a little harder and I'm sure you'll do great.