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A poem I wrote
« on: January 21, 2006, 04:38:54 pm »
Hey, who do you think you are?
Coming into my room when
you know I am bare with
all of this chiffon of my soul

Hey, who do you think you are?
Coming into my eyes when
I have them shut so tight
all of my heart is bleeding

Bleeding because you picked her
over the one you knew first
why can't you just let it go
let it go
let it go?
Seething because you picked her
over the one you knew best
why can't you just move on now
move on now
move on now?

I wrote it last night because Tad didn't call me and well I know I kind've overreacted but I'm an emotional chik lol!
Anyways I wrote in the style of Ashlee Simpson/Lindsay Lohan other chik rokers like that.  Hope you all like it although I know it's not as good as Bill's stuff.
That laffy taffy; that laffy taffy
OH YEAH!!

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Re: A poem I wrote
« Reply #1 on: January 22, 2006, 02:31:44 pm »
You used the word chiffon in a song, you get mad props just for pulling that off :D

Don't knock your stuff and compare it to mine, I write a different style than you do, and honestly my more recent stuff has become more poppy, so theres nothing wrong with writing stuff like this.

It's good, you should build on it more :)

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Re: A poem I wrote
« Reply #2 on: January 22, 2006, 04:32:11 pm »
That is totally kewl! :x2 :x2 :x2